Spark city world professional#
The cover is attractive and professional (though the main character looks a bit confused by the fact that he’s holding two swords), but within the first few chapters it became obvious this wasn’t a book I was going to enjoy. Laura : There isn’t much I can add that hasn’t already been said. I don’t even especially dislike him, I simply don’t care for him even the slightest bit, which made reading tedious.Īdding in that I constantly found myself putting down the book and doing anything else, and never having the drive to actually pick it back up, aside from “You gotta read this for SPFBO,” I simply gave up – it’s not for me. Julia: I really don’t like the main character one bit. Especially the attempts at humour simply weren’t my cup of tea at all… I didn’t click with the voice at all, and I found myself rolling my eyes, and sighing a lot. Especially repetitiveness is something that annoys me – and this one had a lot of that. But sadly those 5 chapters already felt like a real chore to me. I read 5 chapters, so I’ll stay here in the initial thoughts section of the review, because I didn’t read enough to get any deeper insight. I quite liked the cover and went in with high hopes! But sadly for me this one was a really early DNF. Julia: I won’t say much because Theo and Beth already said it all… He was very good at it he recalled.Īnd then after a few moments of nothing much happening, something happened. It was a fine question he’d worked on it for hours. “May I join you?” he called out quietly, They were fine words. The author brings a certain motif of juxtaposition to the prose and I can’t work out if it is sincerely attempting to be funny or self-deprecatingly so: The time Erroh spent with “rock” felt a bit like Tom Hanks’ Castaway – man alone with the elements, even down to the ultimate personification of the rock like that of Wilson the inscrutable volley-ball. But given that he spends so much of it on his own, we don’t get to see him much in interaction with others, and it ends up quite tell-y. I guess the intention of these early sections is to “show” us what kind of person Erroh is with a focus on him and his journey. There were several occasions where the very next paragraph was a different time and/or character point of view, and without that clue of a line break the reader is left with a sense of narrative discontinuity and a bit of a struggle to recheck what has happened. On a point of formatting, I would note that time jumps within a chapter need at least a line break if not a little trio of asterisks. I found this quite frustrating and it left me thinking the protagonist was quite melodramatic. There is no consequence to this tense “caught in the act of cheating” moment.īeth: Excellent point, Theo. The opening encounter speaks of tension, but this disappears initially because we are repeatedly taken out of the tense moment by Erroh’s reflecting mid-crisis on the events that have led him to this point, and then finally because nothing happens. It owned the darkness.” – but there is an indulgence of description and of exposition masquerading as the protagonists’ internal reflections/reverie. It swayed in the breeze sending eerie, skulking shadows across the courtyard like giant roving fingers.” And, “Onwards came the ominous rumble, building in intensity. There are some nice lines of description – for example, “The shattered moon’s light caught the leaves of the one tree hanging over the perimeter wall. The story itself has a slow start, so I didn’t really feel I knew where the plot was going within the first 20% or so. This is about a mysterious man – Erroh – with a sword, going to a city. I can’t say it grabs me especially, but it conveys the key elements of the story.
(The cover? Production value? Prose? Editing?) What is more, and very much to his dismay, he’s about to find out he’s not entirely alone either. Fate, however, has greater plans for him.Īfter decades of peace, a great war draws near, and though he doesn’t know it, he is standing in the way of the first wave. Unfortunately, this one really didn’t click with any of us…ĭespite his warriors’ lineage, Erroh would rather waste his potential stumbling alone from one tavern to the next, drinking and gambling. But we’re finally back for phase two with our second finalist review: SPARK CITY. It’s been a while since we concluded phase one of SPFBO 5 with our finalist announcement. If you’re following SPFBO 5, let us know about any entries that have caught your fancy! Join the discussion on social media (there’s a Facebook group here) and weigh in on Twitter using the hashtag #SPFBO.Īnd if you have no idea what’s going on here, go ahead and check out our introduction to round 1! Phase 2 of the Self-Published Fantasy Blog-Off is well underway! Keep track of the finalists’ scoreboard here.
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